Do you like the beginning of my story? Feedback TRULY appreciated!!?
Question: Note: This is VERY girly. If you're a guy you very likely won't like it.
Chapter 1: Every Story Has a Beginning
Individual can be hard
Or life can be great,
It depends on your choices
And what lies in your nemesis.
Answer: Mate the poem at the beginning... I can't really tell if this is considerable or not, I need more to go on. Your writing style is great, it could use a bit of editing, but that's solely my personal taste. The content could go either way...

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